Friday, 7 January 2011

Friday Flash: Uncertainty

The sea looks calm.

A brisk wind whistles through cliff-top gorse and tugs at my bootleg jeans.

Should I stay and admire the view?

Or will you push me one final time?

24 comments:

  1. Wasted no time getting to that end. I interpreted it as someone has shoved her that far, and she might be killed. Am I close?

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  2. Thanks, Tony!

    John, to be honest I woke up, wrote it, and went back to sleep. All I know is that as the first two lines came to me, the character was alone... the rest is open to interpretation ;o)

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  3. No words wasted, Rebecca. :o)

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  4. I was just reading this short short and thinking on the images--questions--you conjured, when my son came and read it over my shoulder, asked what it was.

    I explained. He read it closer and said he thought it would be a good story starter, fun to write the end to.

    I liked your story. I LOVED that you inspired my reluctant reader/writer child! :)

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  5. Wow! That was a flash with a bash!

    Good stuff. Glad you used your night-time inspiration. They've so often evaporated into nothing or lose their essence by morning.

    Small and mighty :)

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  6. I love how open this is for interpretation, each time I read it another set of images, reasons, ending come to mind.

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  7. I love this - to me it's almost oriental in saying so much in so few words. Almost poetic in what it says - and what it doesn't quite say.

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  8. I'm with Estrella - each time i read it, new images come to mind. Short and powerful - well done :-)

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  9. Yes, it could be suicidal or murderous depending on how you look at it. Interesting ideas come in that sleepy awake state sometimes!

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  10. The possibilities are endless here. I agree with PJ. I read it differently every time. Nice want to start something. Very cool.

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  11. Short and awesome. What in the world were you dreaming about, I wonder?

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  12. Excellent bite to this - I love your clarification that the character was alone. That just opens up all sorts of possibilities.

    Really well done.

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  13. Perfectly poetic and precise. Love it.

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  14. I absolutely loved this. The push can mean so many things.

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  15. Short and sharp. Very nicely done, Rebecca.

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  16. Brilliant Rebecca, just brilliant!

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  17. I keep coming back to the first line - the appearance of a calm sea. It's turning over in my mind. And then the push at the end opens up so many variants.
    Adam B @revhappiness

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  18. Wow, really powerful for something so short. I thought she was murdered, but then you said she was alone, so I'm thinking suicide?
    Your dreams must be terrifying!

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  19. So many ways to interpret this! It gave me a spooky feeling. Wonderful!

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  20. I get the feeling that she is referring to a mental push, possibly from the way she feels herself perceived by someone else.

    For such a short story it is brimming with psychological possibilities.

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  21. Wow! So much emotion and so many different ways to read it. Like some of the others, my first thought was homicide, then suicide and now I'm not sure either of those are correct. You've done a great job of making us think out side of the box, or in this case, words.

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  22. A chilling poem certainly open for interpretation. Provocative, Rebecca.

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  23. I love when a story is so perfect with so few words. Awesome.

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